The primary goal of technical writing is to provide useful and necessary information.
Write Accurate
Write Accurate

Write Accurate

ORIGINAL:

For example, you can monitor the CPU usage and disk reads and writes of your ABC instances and then use this data to determine whether you should launch additional instances to handle increased load.

BETTER:

For example, you can monitor the CPU usage and disk reads and writes of your ABC instances and then use that data to determine whether you should launch additional instances to handle increased load.

EXPLANATION:

In the sentence, “that” should be used instead of “this”. The data is not close to the speaker (writer) which means “that” should be used. Here’s a similar sentence that uses “that”. You can retrieve a basketball from the garage and use that ball to shoot hoops with.

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